First cut feedback!

We have a finaly cut of the music video sorted. We know there are some alterations that need to be made, but we want to get feedback on the work we have done so far, such as the narrative - if it works or not, the shots and angles - if people think it has worked or not. We put it on youtube and then onto Facebook and Twitter.

Here is the link for youtube;
http://www.youtube.com/watch?feature=player_embedded&v=2x-aM7SOtzg

This is the feedback we got off Facebook;